Haikuwrimo - week three

Done for MSJames' Haikuwrimo project. The idea is to write a haiku every day for a month. More details about it can be found here. More details about haiku rules and how they apply in English and in a modern environment are explained here. I have written about emotion in a couple of these, which is slightly non-standard in haiku, which tends to be a visually-descriptive art form, but I do feel the structure can apply.

I will update these every day as the week goes on! So when you see it reappearing in your devwatch, it -has- changed!

I have very little experience with haiku so would gladly welcome any critique, particularly from others involved in the project. Hopefully we can all improve as the month goes on!

15 - I noticed today at the station that when you go and see someone off on the train, there's always a crowd of other people (be they mothers, fathers, friends, boyfriends or girlfriends) doing the same thing. I've noticed this a few times before. And yet I've never noticed it when I'm the one getting on the train.
18. In theory the light from street lights should be warm and comforting, but it doesn't really feel that way when the whole area's deserted and you're the only one in it. This is the view I get from my bedroom window at night.
19. - Originally I had the last line as "and mental scars". Then I got rid of the 'and'. Then I felt like I had to add a dash or colon. Do you think it'd be better with the 'and'? without the 'and' but without the second-line punctuation?

Haikuwrimo week one
Haikuwrimo week two
Haikuwrimo week four
Haikuwrimo week five


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